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This paragraph is amazing: "Gashes cut deep into its dark, blood-stained fur, showing muscle cut to the bone. The Grizzly stands, reaching up to its full towering height and groans in torment." What power! This description shares with the reader the gut-wrenching intensity of the moment. Truly felt the agony. Splendid writing.
Camilla - Both Chapter 3 and 4 are terrific. Your hiking holiday with Jamie is so beautifully rendered is makes me want to go, to hike and finish the day with a hot bath and that amazing, simple meal with a glass of wine! And then, so vividly described - your return home to Greenwich Village surrounded by the colors of fall. Having lived in the West Village, it touched memories of the beauty of those old trees and narrow, cobblestone streets!
Chapter 4 takes a dramatic and unpredictable turn, evoking the helplessness of this absolutely unexpected event - Jamie landing in the ER.
"We sit together in silence, holding hands. The encircling blue curtains seem to isolate us from the outside world and the window only offers an ending. It’s as though each molecule of air pushes down on us with an unexpected weight. Jamie knows I’ll be here for him, but we don’t know what the outcome will be."
This beautifully conveys the feeling of being suspended in this state of the unknown and having no choice but to dwell here... a most frightening place to be, especially after writing earlier about the "control" you and Jamie like to have. Also, a great place to end this chapter. So well done.
This paragraph is amazing: "Gashes cut deep into its dark, blood-stained fur, showing muscle cut to the bone. The Grizzly stands, reaching up to its full towering height and groans in torment." What power! This description shares with the reader the gut-wrenching intensity of the moment. Truly felt the agony. Splendid writing.
Thanks so much Deborah ✨🌟💖🙏🕊😘
I love your Gateless feedback 🤩 Can't wait to see you on Thurs and hear all about your Gateless week. xo
Camilla - Both Chapter 3 and 4 are terrific. Your hiking holiday with Jamie is so beautifully rendered is makes me want to go, to hike and finish the day with a hot bath and that amazing, simple meal with a glass of wine! And then, so vividly described - your return home to Greenwich Village surrounded by the colors of fall. Having lived in the West Village, it touched memories of the beauty of those old trees and narrow, cobblestone streets!
Chapter 4 takes a dramatic and unpredictable turn, evoking the helplessness of this absolutely unexpected event - Jamie landing in the ER.
"We sit together in silence, holding hands. The encircling blue curtains seem to isolate us from the outside world and the window only offers an ending. It’s as though each molecule of air pushes down on us with an unexpected weight. Jamie knows I’ll be here for him, but we don’t know what the outcome will be."
This beautifully conveys the feeling of being suspended in this state of the unknown and having no choice but to dwell here... a most frightening place to be, especially after writing earlier about the "control" you and Jamie like to have. Also, a great place to end this chapter. So well done.
So much gratitude for your generosity and kindness, Annette! Thank you so much for reading and for your beautiful Gateless feedback! ✨🌟💖🙏🕊😘